Practice IOC

Self Score

A: Knowledge and understanding of the text or extract - ....5.... I included and explained some quotes,but not in as much detail as I wanted.

B: Understanding of the use and effects of literary features- ....5.... I mentioned and elaborated on certain literary devices, but again not in as much detail as I should have. Also I don't talk to much about how the features affect the reader.

C: Organization- ....3.... I follow a general direction but I found myself jumping around a bit.

D: Language- ....3.... I don't always use the correct terminology, but I felt for the most part I addressed each topic and got my descriptions across.

Excerpt

“Hold on, Tommy.” Did she actually say your art was ‘rubbish?’”
“If it wasn’t ‘rubbish’ it was something like it. Negligible. That
might have been it. Or incompetent. She might as well have said
rubbish. She said she was sorry she’d told me what she had the last
time because if she hadn’t, I might have sorted it all out by now.”                                    
        “What were you saying through all of this?”
        “I didn’t know what to say. In the end, she actually asked. She
said: ‘Tommy, what are you thinking?’ So I said I wasn’t sure but that
she shouldn’t worry either way because I was all right now. And she
said, no, I wasn’t all right. My art was rubbish, and that was partly                                  
her fault for telling me what she had. And I said to her, but what
does it matter? I’m all right now, no one laughs at me
about that any more. But she keeps shaking her head and saying: ‘It
does matter. I shouldn’t have said what I did.’ So it occurs to me
she’s talking about later, you know, after we leave here. So I                                            
say, ‘But I’ll be all right, Miss. I’m really fit, I know how to look
after myself. When it’s time for donations, I’ll be able to do it really
well.’ When I said this, she starts shaking her head, shaking it
really hard so I’m worried she’ll get dizzy. Then she says:
‘Listen, Tommy, your art, it is important. And not just because it’s evidence. But for your own sake. You’ll get a lot from it, just for yourself.’”
“Hold on. What did she mean, ‘evidence’?”
        “I don’t know. But she definitely said that. She said our art was important, and ‘not just because it’s evidence.’ God knows what she meant. I did actually ask her, when she said that. I said I    didn’t understand what she was telling me, and was it something to do with Madame and her gallery? And she did a big sigh and said: ‘Madame’s gallery, yes, that’s important. Much more important than I once thought. I see that now.’ Then she said: ‘Look, there are all kinds of things you don’t understand, Tommy, and I can’t tell you all about them. Things about Hailsham, about your place in the wider world, all kinds of things. But perhaps one day,you’ll try and find out. They won’t make it easy for you, but if you want to, really want to, you might find out.’ She started shaking her head again after that, though not as bad as before, and she says:‘But why should you be any different? The students who leave here, they never find out much. Why should you be any different?’ I didn’t know what she was talking about, so I just said again: ‘I’ll be all right, Miss.’”